TLC by Chrouya
Script: Suisei no Gargantia - 04 [main-kaori]
Workraw: Suisei_04_10bit


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Then how can they be raised as \Nproductive members of society?   {I added "productive"}{smp: considering the stated intention of the show creators that this is a metaphor about 20-somethings at a loss to integrate into the real world, i think use of the english cliche phrase is the right choice.}
{I have no qualms about this edit. Context gives the same idea}

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You're making something but you don't \Nknow what it is? How strange.
You have no idea what you're actually making? How strange.
{Alternative suggestion, it doesn't really matter if you turn the phrasing around}

102
Say, would you like to take \Na little walk with me?
Say, would you like to have \Na little chat as we walk around?
{literal version}

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{\i1}that label was applied to societal units \Ncomprised of mates and blood relations.{\i0}
{\i1}that label was applied to societal units \Ncomprised of marriage and blood relations.{\i0}
{i'd prefer to use marriage in this case, or something related}
{Shiyuu no Haiguusha: male and female spousing}

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He's a doctor, but people \Ncall him "the Sage".  {don't know why there's a "five" in the Japanese; typo, "go" as honorific instead of "go" = "five"?}
{yes. honorific prefixing exists in Japanese.} {refer to the kanji: 御 }
{For single kanji, you use "o" (such as "onii-san" "ojou-sama" "ocha")}
{for compound kanji, you use "go" (such as "gozaimasu" "goran ni naru" "gojiyuu")}

145
You're busy, huh?
Busy as ever, huh?
{it's more of an expression, so I changed this to an expression as well}

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Sorry, my sister never stops moving.
Sorry, my sister never stops hurrying.
{I think this conveys context better.}

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Your were making a flute, right?
You were making a flute, right?